Writing Showcase
This is an analysis of my quarter-long process for creating an analysis essay that answers the course question: How does Disney contribute to the constructionand a reflection of your progress toward course objectives.
Section One
Planning and Exploratory Writing
Annotation for film Beauty and Beast
This is the scrrenshot from the annotataion of film: Beauty and Beast. It helps to develop my habits of engaged reading. Specifically, I learn to watch the film with the purpose, figuring out how the film conveys the values of gender roles. During watching, I ask questions like whether this scene demonstrate any gender norms. When I found anything related, I made annotations and analyze the scenario.
Exploratory Writing: Star Wars and Gender
This is the excerpt from the exploratory writing and I chose the film, the Force Awakens, to display the progressive gender roles of female characters. Working with the exploratory writing helps me improve my ability to write prose that is focused, and full of details. In fact, I use specifc scene in the film and analyze it to show women's bravery and intelligence, which is focused and detailed,
Section
Two
Peer Review
I regard it as the good advice I gave to the classmates. Firstly, I commited the interesting angle of the thesis statement he made, but I also point out the topic is too broad and not specific enough, so I advese him to focus on some narrowed aspect to illustrate the point. I think I improve my peer review skills through practice, making it more useful and understandable for others.
I considered it as good suggestion I received because not only pointed out the problem of my writing, but also offered a great sample for me to revise. I can easily understand his point and make my essay more organized. It makes me understand the importance of peer review to my writing.
Section
Three
Self-Review
revising unnecessary words
This is the revision that I am going to delete some unnecessary words because I think it might distract the focus of the essay. However, I didn't change it when I edit my articel. Instead, I add one point in the thesis statement so that the comparatison with traditional females are related to the main ideas. I learnt the importance of having a process when you are composing a sophisticated text, especially self-reivew is important since it makes my essay more focused and organized.
Modifying the organization
This is the example of revising the organization of the essay. It's the topic sentence of a new paragraph, but I didn't make it connected with the previous content and it seems not coherent. Thus, I modified it as "Danvers is a more transformative character compared to previous two figures", which serves as a transitional sentence. Self- review helps me to make the essay more logical and organized.
Section
Four
Revision
This is the body paragraph of the essay. I largely changed the organization to better analyze specific scenes in the films. At first, I display a scenario and make great analysis about it. However, the content in the analysis is actually a moment in the film and it might cause confusion when it appears in the analysis. Thus, later, I divide those content into two separate scenes because it's easier to follow and make the argument more focused.
before revision
after reevision
before revision
after revision
This is at the end of the body paragraph. Initially, it ends up with the analysis of the scene and I it lacks source in this paragraph. Hence, I add a secondary source and intergrate it with the original texts to further illustrate women's independent thinking, which makes the essay more credible.